Author's Note: This is a poetic response to The Truman Show. It was targeted at the idea that what's real isn't really real.
The sky,
So blue, so soft, so,
Perfect
The grass
So green, so luscious, so,
Fake
This world
So great, so taken care of, so,
Constructed
This moment
So pleasuring, so perfect, so,
Wrong
This Life
So right, So rigid, so,
Fabricated
My life
May be free,
Should be true,
Will be real
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Are you saying that if you were given the chance to live in a protected bubble, free from crime, or violence, or stress, you would choose to leave that protection? What is being said in the film about "real" life, or what it means to really live? I like the poem; it's just that it poses a question with no sense of answer, and it makes me wonder how you decided that you were finished.
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ReplyDeleteThe ending was great, however I found myself confused a little, the way I took it was the existence of everything around you, in the last segment I found it as excepting everything around you to be real. We all imagine that everything around us is fake or like the set of a television show, however what's our definition of reality? What do we call real, what do we call fake?
ReplyDeleteThat was rather interesting, with an abrupt ending. I think you could have gone on a bit carrying through the same style you had. The poem was still great, and portrayed that you would take living your own life and take what it throws at you instead of taking the perfect life without enduring any sort of pain that makes you stronger in life.
ReplyDeleteLike everyone here said, I thought the poem was great, it's just the last part kind of got me confused because the poem was so negative and then the last part was sort of optimistic. I guess that made it sort of unique, it just made me a little confused. But I thought it was still really good.
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ReplyDeleteThis is a really nice piece. I like the form in which you chose to write, it is simple, but effective on putting your message across. The only thing I would critic would to maybe change or delete on of the stanzas, because after a while, they get a little daunting, and the best part is the very last stanza, which you want to emphasize. anyway, good job!